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How to Write (Better): How to Make Your Words Carry More Authority

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Writing about writing with authority is really hard. Because that insinuates that I know what I'm talking about, and you might all be sitting back, slurping your coffee and thinking you know, that Rita is pretty full of herself.

And therein lies the rub.

When I was a wee tot, children were taught to be humble, to not contradict our elders, to qualify what we had to say with statements like "I think" and "in my opinion" and "I feel." Writers have to unlearn these lessons -- if in this day and age they are actually still taught -- in order to write a tight paragraph.

In 1999, I decided to go back to school and get the writing degree I didn't get in college but always wanted. During the next five years, I unlearned many old habits, but the one that stuck with me the most was removing little qualifiers. It's one of the easiest edits to make without changing the direction or point of your writing, and it's purely mechanical.

My professor taught using three of the bibles of writing: On Writing Well, by William Zinsser; The Elements of Editing, A Modern Guide for Editors and Journalists, by Arthur Plotnik; and The Elements of Style, by William Strunk, Jr. and E.B. White. These teachers changed my writing forever, and I am indebted to their no-nonsense approach to editing yourself and others. One of their greatest lessons? Own your opinions, and omit little qualifiers.

What's a little qualifier? "Sort of." "A little bit." "I think." They add nothing but words, and writing is not a word-count contest, ever.

How do you do that? Start chopping.

This is your blog, your post, your writing. We know it’s what you think and what you feel –- don’t tell us that. It removes the power of your words via overclarification. What works in spoken language doesn’t always translate well to writing, as you don’t get nonverbal feedback and must establish yourself without being able to see your readers’ response.

If you were mad, you were mad. You might have been furious. Say it. Get over your fear of saying what you really mean.

If you don’t like a topic, don’t care about a topic, and aren’t getting paid to write about that topic as a freelancer, scrap it. We’ll be able to tell if you’re only half there, and why in the world would you blog about something you’re not interested in? Don’t do it for SEO, don’t do it for traffic. Just don’t do it. It’ll diminish your credibility in the long run.

Even if you’re telling a story, you can still make a point. You don’t necessarily have to come out at the end with “the moral of the story is ... ,” but leave your reader with a conclusion regarding where you stand on an issue or what happened in the story.

When you're working on a blog post, read it back over before you hit "Publish" and take out all the little qualifiers and small words that don't add anything to the sentence. There's a world of difference between "I think the reason my daughter doesn't listen to me is because I yell too much" and "My daughter doesn't listen to me when I yell." If you're having trouble making the sentence work without those little qualifiers, flip the clauses like I just did. Lose "is because" and "I think" -- they're not adding anything, and they're clunking up the meter. That first sentence is a mouthful, and it takes too long to say. If it takes too long to say out loud, it needs to be cut down. Period.

Lest I sound preachy (and that is an occupational hazard when you're trying to write with authority), rest assured I'm not immune to sprinkling little qualifiers into my speech, into my texts, into my emoticons. I'm not saying you should never temper your opinions, not at all. If you're writing, though, for an audience, on your blog, in your fiction and poetry and freelance journalism and magazine articles -- that's when you can't afford these extra words, not when you're owning an opinion. They clutter up your writing, but they may not clutter up your life. As bloggers, we tend to write like we talk, and that's when the extra words sneak in.

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Nordette Adams 6 pts

I read your post, and would have commented there but didn't want to register for yet another site or sign in through Facebook or Twitter. :-) Yes. How I write for my blog and how I write elsewhere are not the same either. Even at my blog, are all posts are not created equal.

Nordette Adams ( http://www.bookotopia.com ) is a BlogHer CE ( http://www.blogher.com/haystackprofile/viewprofile... ) & you can find her other stuff through Her 411 ( http://her411.com ).

BShallue 5 pts

I started writing a comment, but realized it had evolved into a blog post. I didn't want to waste it! You can read it here:

http://barbarashallue.typepad.com/musing_in_long_h... ( http://barbarashallue.typepad.com/musing_in_long_h... )

Also, I think Maggie from Okay. Fine. Dammit. is a great example of authoritative writing. She is one of the best writers around, blogging or otherwise. If you haven't read her stuff, you need to!

Barbara Shallue writes about her life at http://barbarashallue.typepad.com and is contributing editor of http://jobs4autism.com.

Nordette Adams 6 pts

I agree with what's said in Rita's post, and so, I had some reservations about sharing other thoughts. Once you know the rules and understand the difference between formal writing and informal writing, how to craft pieces to a conversational tone, etc., issues like qualifiers or no qualifiers have more to do with painting mood via style, cadence, diction, etc., while keeping purpose in mind.

I also especially like the point about reading your own posts before publishing and would add sometimes it's good to read your work aloud. I'll be adding a post at another site in a few days about the benefits of listening to audio of great literary works or writers you'd like to emulate.

Still, no matter what the writer's skill level, a piece of writing always benefits from having a good editor, help new media writers rarely have any more. Sometimes you get to a point of reading not what you wrote but what you think you wrote.

Nordette Adams ( http://www.bookotopia.com ) is a BlogHer CE ( http://www.blogher.com/haystackprofile/viewprofile... ) & you can find her other stuff through Her 411 ( http://her411.com ).

LeahK 5 pts

As an editor by day/blogger by night, I know both that rules are there for a reason and that sometimes it's good to break them (so long as you're doing it on purpose and for a good reason). My favorite part of this post, though--and it's a point that needs no qualification whatsoever--is your advice for bloggers to read back through their posts before they hit Publish. Better writing will be just the start of the benefits we'll reap from being more thoughtful about what we're saying and how we're saying it.

michellewoo 5 pts

As a reporter, I learned to cut out "I feel" and "I believe" in the quotes I use. It made all the difference in my stories.

As a blogger, I always find myself writing "kinda," "sorta," "wee bit," and so on. I sometimes use these words because they somehow add to the rhythm of my sentences. Or I'll use them when I'm trying to sound vulnerable in my storytelling. But maybe my usage of these words is detracting from what I'm really trying to say.

This was a great post. Lots to think about.

Follow my blog at www.michellewoo.com ( http://www.michellewoo.com ).

SewSweetStitches 5 pts

Obviously I have no idea what I'm talking about when it comes to writing, but this makes me a little sad!
While I completely believe what you're saying, I'd be reluctant to try this out on my own blog.
One of the things I love most about blogs is the writer's voice coming through. And I don't mean voice as in "letting yourself be heard blah blah blah" kind of thing. I mean the way they speak in real life!
In fact, I quickly lose interest in blogs that are missing those quirky little add-ins used in literal speech. They help to set each blog writer apart, and I feel like I know her a little better.

Mistiejourney 5 pts

This is a gem. I needed to read it and it will be passed along to my kids!

Blog ON!

Kim McAllister

www.emergiblog.com 

norarachel 5 pts

If only I could get back the hours I have spent editing out "Needless to say" or "It seems to me" from colleagues' professional writing.

http://www.nonlineargirl.com

The Word Cellar 5 pts

This is a great post, Rita. Writing about writing (with authority, no less!) is indeed an exercise in intimidation.

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Jennifer (Jenna) McGuiggan is a writer, editor, and coach who falls in love with words daily. Visit her in The Word Cellar ( http://www.thewordcellar.com/blog ).

Rita Arens 7 pts

I think I feel I edited it 1,0000 times. :)

Rita Arens authors Surrender Dorothy and is the editor of Sleep is for the Weak. She is BlogHer's assignment and syndication editor.

miavitadolce 5 pts

I haven't written a thing since high school and I am looking forward to enrolling in a "Writing for the Digital Age" class the local University is offering this coming fall. The more you write the better you become and I hope with some instruction and practise my writing will improve.

Grace - La Mia Vita Dolce - http://gracessweetlife.com

Just_Margaret 5 pts

It *is* powerful...and creeps in on even the most aware among us, from time to time!

~Margaret

Just Margaret ( http://maurhoffbarney.blogspot.com )

muffintopmommy 5 pts

What a great reminder--less is more. Really. I majored in English and Communication, so I should know all this. But I'm guilty of prattling on my blog. Sort of. I think? Ok, maybe.

Just kidding. (Not really.)

Loved the piece! :)

kbojar 5 pts

I’ve been trying to get those little qualifiers and apologetic asides out of my writing, but just can’t seem to do it. Old habits die hard.

Interesting point, Margaret, that "Seeing otherwise confident, capable women using qualifiers in their correspondence often surprised me." They may have been able to get the feminine qualifiers out of their professional style but they creep into their writing.

Gender socialization is powerful.

Karen Bojar

http://www.the-next-stage.com/

Nordette Adams 6 pts

I hope you caught the links at the end, which included this one to the 40 Bad Books ( http://americanbookreview.org/PDF/Top40BadBooks.pd... ) (PDF) she referenced. One of the contributors says a good writer must be willing to write a bad novel. I agree. I say the same the same thing about poetry.

As a writer who aspires to be a published novelist, I am comforted by the number of imperfect books that get published. (Talking about what I see in stores, not the 40 bad books list) Sometimes we freeze up, fearing that what what we're writing is horrible. The result of that is we never finish or if we finish, we never submit our work anywhere. *picture of me in dictionary*

I don't think John Irving's book of short stories can possibly be worse than the Horatio Alger novel that's being remixed at GalleyCat ( http://www.mediabistro.com/galleycat/contests/worl... ). :-)

Nordette Adams ( http://www.bookotopia.com ) is a BlogHer CE ( http://www.blogher.com/haystackprofile/viewprofile... ) & you can find her other stuff through Her 411 ( http://her411.com ).

Rita Arens 7 pts

This is actually a really good article, and I totally agree with it. I learned so much from John Irving's collection of his early "bad" short stories, Trying to Save Piggy Sneed.

Rita Arens authors Surrender Dorothy and is the editor of Sleep is for the Weak. She is BlogHer's assignment and syndication editor.

Nordette Adams 6 pts

Just saw this at Salon.com, "Bad writing: What is it good for? ( http://www.salon.com/books/laura_miller/2010/05/11... )"

I was going to email you the link, and then decided to make it available to everyone.

Nordette Adams ( http://www.bookotopia.com ) is a BlogHer CE ( http://www.blogher.com/haystackprofile/viewprofile... ) & you can find her other stuff through Her 411 ( http://her411.com ).

Rita Arens 7 pts

You nailed it -- the point it to practice cutting until you just don't write the words anymore. It takes a few months.Excellent points.

Rita Arens authors Surrender Dorothy and is the editor of Sleep is for the Weak. She is BlogHer's assignment and syndication editor.

Rita Arens 7 pts

I don't think I would have ever found mine without my personal blog.

Rita Arens authors Surrender Dorothy and is the editor of Sleep is for the Weak. She is BlogHer's assignment and syndication editor.

Rita Arens 7 pts

As part of this project, we'll be adding a discussion post on Thursdays. I'll be asking for links, so please comment then! I'll tweet about it -- follow us at @blogher or on Facebook!

Rita Arens authors Surrender Dorothy and is the editor of Sleep is for the Weak. She is BlogHer's assignment and syndication editor.

Just_Margaret 5 pts

I learned to put the 'oomph' into my writing when I did a lot of business writing and correspondence as a financial services flunky. I quickly began realizing that my female colleagues emails and memos were peppered with a LOT of qualifiers. "I think..." or "It may be just me, but..." or "Perhaps I'm not approaching this properly, but..." It made them seem timid.

This was tricky for me. I was a bit younger than most of my peers at 25, and I wanted to hold my own among them. Seeing otherwise confident, capable women using qualifiers in their correspondence often surprised me. I made a concerted effort to stop being wishy-washy in my writing, as you suggest, by removing words that implied that I wasn't confident in my statements. The short-term downside? I worried that I came off as pushy or bitchy. It turns out that I didn't, I came off as a contributor who knew her stuff and could communicate clearly and effectively. I also reaped the benefits in terms of promotions and special project assignments. Authoritative writing also has served me well because with practice writing that way, I found that better phrasing came to mind more readily in business meetings, improving my verbal interactions as well.

Fast forward to today, after years of cutting qualifiers, I am trucking along churning out my first ms. Nowadays, I find myself self-editing for 'authority' naturally as I go. With practice, it gets easier to identify the 'mushier' language and find that more authoritative voice. I work to make sure that any wishy-washy language only comes out when I deliberately choose to use it for effect.

This is a great article, Rita, with helpful examples. Thanks!

~Margaret

Just Margaret ( http://maurhoffbarney.blogspot.com )

gorgona 5 pts

Your tips are helpful, thanks.
I am starting a blog I believe I have found my voice Now it's time to network
http://mgco4you.com/sValentino/

corihoward 5 pts

Thanks so much for your insight. I teach moms how to write their stories - whether it's for their scrapbooks, blogs or publication. And it's always inspiring for them to read this kind of stuff. So I will pass it on. And if you're ever looking for a guest post in this section, let me know. I offer writing tips to my students all the time and would love to share!
Thanks again
Cori Howard
www.themomoirproject.com ( http://www.themomoirproject.com )

Rita Arens 7 pts

Denise actually told me this year she thought my writing had improved on my personal blog. It meant a lot and also reminded me to take the time to edit myself even when I'm in a hurry, because people do notice.

Rita Arens authors Surrender Dorothy and is the editor of Sleep is for the Weak. She is BlogHer's assignment and syndication editor.

texasebeth 6 pts

I will be the first to admit I don't write well. (I just deleted the word "very" thanks to your tip.)

I do enjoy sharing (I'm a blabbermouth) my life, etc. via my blog. My professors lived by Strunk & White too. I'm looking forward to reading more tips. I have learned quite a bit from the How to Blog (Bettter) group on BlogHer.

The highlight of my year was when someone posted anonymously on my blog that my writing had improved & that I was beginning to find "my voice".

Elizabeth

@texasebeth

http://texasebeth.blogspot.com

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